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Re: Short Story-ish
This looks like a quick character sketch rather than the story itself, but I liked it. You've got a good balance between showing and telling, as well as action, exposition, ...
Sat Mar 29, 2008 2:55 pm -
Re: The Clouds Above Me Don't Realize It's Spring
Hey, In most parts of Canada, we can get snow in April. This isn't so bad. Though I do remember that last year I was fighting with students about keeping ...
Sat Mar 29, 2008 1:58 am -
Re: Lindt Love
aww! I couldn't eat them now!
Fri Mar 28, 2008 11:31 pm -
Re: The Human Side of Things (revised)
August 30, 2008 It took a bus, the subway, the train, a cab, and more than six hours, but we are finally here in our hotel room in Cornwall. Mom, ...
Fri Mar 28, 2008 10:26 pm -
Re: Rose Hill Cemetery
Some people say it dragged a bit, I didn't feel it dragged enough, if that makes any sense at all. In something set in a graveyard, you have the perfect ...
Fri Mar 28, 2008 3:24 pm -
Re: New! Hall of Fame of Extraordinary Young Writers
Very nice, Nate.
Fri Mar 28, 2008 2:41 pm -
Re: Saint Is Not A Poet
Kokobeans has a point about accents when it comes to rhyming. Anyway, I'm in a good mood so I shall not be as cruel as Suz was. It was amusing. ...
Fri Mar 28, 2008 2:39 pm -
Re: Remind You of Anyone?
The drawing is pretty good, but I couldn't read the words. They were a bit too small.
Fri Mar 28, 2008 1:56 pm -
Re: Midterms
I agree with the previous comment about the last line. Saying you're off to pass it makes it a little more optomistic than it should me, I think.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 9:08 pm -
Re: This is what happens to an overactive imagination...
Remind me to take away any sugar you have.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 9:04 pm -
Re: Untitled
I think what you need here is to be a lot more visual. The first stanza is great. Try to do the same thing with the rest of the poem.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 7:31 pm -
Re: Hello, my name is...
Hello, my name is Fairy Beery, but you can call me Febe. I hide my wings with a sweat suit, and I brought beer to the human race.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 7:25 pm -
Re: Post a Lolcat!
Hee hee hee. Lolcats are the best.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 5:29 pm -
Re: Star Ranking System
I wonder if anyone will get that many red stars. 1250 is a lot.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 5:26 pm -
Re: Her Only Friend
You've got some beautiful narrative here. However, I have to agree with KJ about it being unclear. It was so vague, it's very hard to tell exactly what's going on.
Thu Mar 27, 2008 3:28 pm
