Rei

You know, it wouldn't surprize me if you and I are the only ones in this group who know anything about Beltane.

In a case like that, the boss probably already has a particular bias anyway. I only have a problem with jokes like that if they are made out of ignorance ...

Have you looked into non-surgical options? Because there are dozens that are a lot safer than surgery.

Yes, I have.

Yeppers. Can't wait until the season starts again.

Definitely not crap. However, did sound like you were trying too hard to sound poetic and vague. You know, being literary to the point where it no longer sounds like ...

I find it fascinating how people automatically think that it's death she is considering. The reason this seems like such a unique suicide story is because it's NOT a suicide ...

Meh. Maybe it is hokey, but it really means a lot to me. I think I might have been asking myself those questions when I wrote it.

His efforts, and efforts inspired by his, raised the money needed to advance research and build treatment facilities that might not have existed otherwise. It was his dedication and concern ...

What you need to do is scrap this and start all over again. You're rushing into it. It's a fairly standard premis for a science fiction novel, but there's nothing ...

I'd say this is a pretty decent start. Definitely creates a lot of curiosity about what will happen next. However, I thought there were a few things you could have ...

This is more of a piece of creative non-fiction rather than fiction. But it's a good start. I can tell you really understand what you're writing about. However, I would ...

Not bad. Only, why didn't you give the male character a name, and why did you wait until the third paragraph to give us the woman's name? Unless you had ...

A decent beginning. All right ideas. However, you could be a little more concise in your use of language, especially during the dream, and sound less like you were using ...

I'm not talking about fitting in. Looking a certain way doesn't guarantee that you'll fit in, as demonstarted by my best friend in middle school, who I thought was beautiful, ...