RedBird

Humanity has almost destroyed the planet, through war and pollution. Some animals and plants have mutated into dangerous species that seem to have one purpose: devouring humans. They roam outside ...

Cutter, I am shocked at myself. I don't care what Liara does! She can run away from all of this, go back to her old life. But my mouth won't ...

Cutter, This is all going WRONG! We were supposed to end up in an abandoned area, but no, instead there's not just one, but two other people there. When I ...

We could kind of teleport next to her without knowing she'd be there? Something like that.

Cutter, I try to smile. I'm conflicted about everything right now, and I can't put an order to anything. "Don't apologize, Cath," I say, "I just got caught up in ...

Cutter, I realize that I'm quivering uncontrollably. I put my face in my hands. "'S okay, Leigh, " I mutter, sitting down. Unbidden, I start crying. "I just want to ...

Cutter, I'm shocked. I was sure, after all we'd been through...Why doesn't she want...want to DO something about it all? "Why?" I ask, bitterness evident, "It's not just personal, Cath. ...

Cutter, Psychic, I beam at my friends. I knew they'd back me up. "Well, okay then," I smile, "Let's assess what we have right now. I should know all of ...

Cutter, Psychic, As everyone wakes up, I make up my mind. Yes, we're going to do something. Or at least I am. If they don't want to come, I won't ...

Okay...I'm sorry that I haven't started this yet...but we can do so now! I've been pretty busy... Cutter, Psychic, It's been 2 months. 2 months since we managed to escape ...

I definitely think that you should expand on does seem to be the beginning of chapter, rather than the whole. The rhythm of the writing is very good, I must ...

Shall I hazard a guess and say that this will be Faerie oriented? That's MY impression anyway, and I'll let you know that it was my first impression, and that ...

Well, this definitely and interesting starter...a good draw-in, anyway. You might want to tweak the format for both of the little "bios" of the character, so that it doesn't look ...

Daemys is a boy. Daemys, Heart breaker? Nah. Definitely NOT the nickname that I'm looking for. How 'bout something like "Freckles" or "Loose?" No, those aren't any good either. I ...

Daemys, Nope. Cardinal, or Birdwoman, as I shall now call her, and I are not going to get along. Ah, well. The ups and downs. You know. Not feeling particularly ...