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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Breathe

    Thanks! I guess I did better than I thought...I did make some edits, though!

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Watercolour Sunrise

    This goes really well with the painting (which I love). The description and imagery were beautiful and entirely believable. However, there was just one thing that really bugged me. The ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Hues of Blue

    Hey there, RedBird here for a review! Okay, for the most part, I'd say that I enjoyed this poem. The rhyming, I think, worked well, and your rhythm usually stayed ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: And Then, Our Endeavour

    This really drew me in, at the beginning. It was very well thought out, I can see. Firstly, on the ninth line of the first stanza, I think you meant ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Brother

    This poem has some great ideas, and if you work on it some more, it will really work well. I think this has already been said, but the first stanza ...

    Jan 4, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Nelson Mandela: The man made of peace

    Okay...I liked this, I really did. Nelson Mandela is a great subject for a poem. The rhyming is fairly good, but, as Kamas said, the way you spaced the lines ...

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Saviors

    That's what I'm going for...but other people need to post for that to happen!

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Breathe

    I haven't submitted anything in awhile...So, feel free to rip this to shreds! :D Breathe As I step into the new found world, Finally bereft of winter's frozen grip, I ...

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Saviors

    Please, let's not let this die...

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Darker Side of The Street

    Vecian, The fact that I'm an earth warlock helps me when I enter the hollow tree. The closeness of the passage isn't what worries me, though. I don't like vampires, ...

    Jan 3, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Saviors

    Burns, I whirl around, just Az jumps out of a tree. The forest is shifting around me, pushed my a huge wind and making it hard to locate anything by ...

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Archive Re: Playing God

    I just remembered this...Can we finally start it, Silversun?

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Saviors

    For the sake of getting us all back together, I think that the river should indeed be the Thames.

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Archive Re: The Saviors

    >>>C'mon guys! Let's not let this die!

    Jan 2, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Full Moon Flapjacks

    Hey, RedBird here for a review, Okay, let's cut straight to the chase: I like the ideas, but they weren't presented very well. The rhythm was off, and there were ...

    Jan 2, 2010


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien