Rayneisthename

This was a really good poem I only have one suggestion. When harvest time has just begun, I fade into the golden sun. I didn't think the "and" worked here ...

I kinda liked the idea of this but maybe this could be the beginning or ending of a story. I didn't really think that it would fit with the whole ...

These are AMAZING!!! Maybe you could of focused just a little bit more on the last photo but these as I have said before are AMAZING!!

Thank you snailsareslimy! Thanks for the advice:)

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I have to agree Erinaghdra in saying that it is a little vague and the ending was kind of rushed. I liked the beginning because I understand the meaning but ...

Okay, so. This is my first short story I am posting so far. I kind of forgot about it until I started rumaging through Microsoft Word a little bit. I ...

Well, this certainly is different from anything i have read before. But that's a good thing. You kind of lost me in the end there when she came to the ...

This is absolutly wonderfull, but the line about the cake was a little random. This really speaks to people because we have all had that friend or boyfriend that has ...

Okay, there was a lot to reveiw and edit in this but I think Flow pretty much hit the nail on the head so I won't say to much. This ...

I was afraid for my kids and being that I was a teacher I was also afraid what some of the students could do to them if I made them ...

Thank you Pink and Lava! Everyone is so welcoming here and congrats to Pink. Page 64 is still a wonderful accomplishment! And Lava------- I FIND CONTACTS SOOO ANNOYING! I so ...

Thanks for reviewing and I understand about some of the lines not flowing as well as others. I had kind of a tough time with this poem because this is ...

This picture is really nice, I never thought a cow would be so photogenic(lol) this is really good and this cow is especially CUTE!!

So, I am new here and this is my first post. So enjoy and comment! Subtract me from you and we get, angery and depressed we know we belong together ...