RandomGrrl

"Paint orchestras of sound within. Make musical heaven." These lines are my favorite in here! Very effective and also beautiful. Very deep! The imagery is great and this is an ...

"She stared, flabbergasted, at the acne-riddled boy who handed her trophy." Handed her "the" trophy? Handed her "her" trophy...? Missing a word. Simply not cricket, dear. "Crush him, burn him, ...

Hey, I got a piece in Other called Intuition that could use a crit. It's in 5 parts, and it's "finished," so feel free to take a look! Thanks! PM ...

Hey, I got a 5 part story in Other that I'd like to get looked at. If you can get around to it! Thanks! It's called Intuition. Please bear in ...

Check it out if you have the time! RG :D

Howdy hey! Got a story in five sections called "Intuition" in Other. Check it out if you want! :D RG

Hi! So, would somewhat-strange fiction count? Not like, "Aah! The tacos are attacking!" kind of strange. Just a freaky twist kind of story. If you're interested at all, click the ...

Oh, I should also mention, that though it isn't rated on there it IS somewhat freaky... maybe PG-13 if you're being conservative. So, if you don't want to look at ...

Hey! I would really love feedback on "Intuition" if you get a chance. It's a story separated into five sections... If you do look at it, bear in mind that ...

Hey Suzanne! You give fantastic crits, I've noticed. If you get a chance (no pressure) I'd love feedback on: Thanks! :D RG

True Love A large, rotund woman, fat rolling over her khakis, gets the bread dough, which is the color of her skin and beats it. Her squat, chubby knuckles squeeze ...

Talk About It "Maybe," they say," You just need to talk about it." But I'm sure I don't want to. That it's a bad idea. "Come on," they say, "You'll ...

Right, first thing I noticed: Salmon crushed his chalk into the blackboard as he dotted the “i” in “impressionism”. (Love that his name is Salmon, by the way, perfect). Er... ...

Ha. Beat me too this one. No fair. IT'S ON! Jk. What can I say? Fantastic.

Oh yeah, first crit! HA! Suits and vendors weary lean on Eh... "wearily"? Is this meant to be "weary," because that actually looks like a grammatical error. *Writing audience gasps ...