Rahul

u just took my attention.. believe me you earned a lot of respect by me just please clear the Mr. S or is this second chapter..I really like the part ...

Hey.. I like it just be a little easy make it simple and easy to re dares

Chapter-2 Life is fun I saw a dark black sky with no stars. I couldn’t see the ground everywhere it was fogy the white fog covered the whole ground like ...

good potential its like a betray poem presented in a very touching manner good work.!

Well. I really like your perspective of your story specially in the first paragraph sometimes I don't understand who is the speaker and who is the listener Though it's really ...

and shoot me in PM my other mistakes.. Thanks

Some told me.. to make some changes in the chapter so here it is.. please comment Chapter-1 Here I remember I looked outside the window, the Sun was playing with ...

good like it pretty awesome

Your story is good, i really like the idea of jogging love i just want to add if your character is workaholic.. then show his nature, how he left his ...

really great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

really awesome.. keep writing the title of the poem really describes the poem

welcome to YWS.. hope to see a great author in you

its nice .. I really like the idea the fault which i find here i, its seem like a play don't start the dialogue with the name put" "s it ...

i like it.. kids will love it keep it up.. just u are taking the story too Deep keep writing!!!

Chapter-1 Here I remember I am confused whether to take it as a chapter or as an Epilogue by the way how is it??? I looked outside the window. It ...