RaggleFraggle

i think the first title was fine. im not much for change in stories. i think this one is fine i like your original stuff. besides maybe grammer or w/e ...

nice job! :) once again didn't notice many errors. i may have skipped some but still... i didn''t notice. i have a crappy vocab so cant really help much. i'm ...

whoaa big words. omg profanity lol jk. isn't speeded suposed to be sped or something? idk your better at that stuff. the word potholes looks funny. lol its like poth. ...

i didn't notice any errors. and the story line is perfectly fine to me. but im no good with spelling or punctuation so dont go on my word lol. sorry. ...