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Good job on keeping the perspective consistent. A few slip ups here and there, but no big deal. I have one big question, though--where is Vincent? He's mentioned three times? ...

It is, it is! Magic and spaceships and unreality, oh my! Thanks for the welcome, Snoink!

Hey RedRaven! I've read this through and have a few suggestions for you to try out and some comments/questions for your pondering. One of those questions is, why Peyton and ...

Well, seeing as this is from the middle of a piece and not the beginning, I was a little lost. My knowledge of fantasy carried me through to the end, ...

(Please pardon any bluntness. It's just my way.) Grammar, my friend, grammar. When the reader can't figure out what you're trying to say because punctuation's missing or misplaced or sentences ...

Thanks Kitty, LadyPurple, Kamas! See you all about!

Got a handful of things here for you. First , probably most important--whose POV is this from? It seemed to be Tony's for the most part, but then it faded ...

Thanks, everyone! (But I don't like coffee!)

If they're grouchy, they apparently haven't had their tea. Which, for the record, I like double strength, iced even in winter, with nothing mixed in. :D And oh, that is ...

Hm, best friends? That depends. Do you have tea? If so, iced or hot? With a) sugar, b) honey, c) milk, or d), none of the above? The future of ...

Hello, everyone, As my posting here on this board would suggest, I'm new! And glad to be here. I write fantasy and pseudo sci-fi, novel length. My current project is ...