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Love. Hearts. Confetti. Half of me wants you to not read this review, U, and go write the next chapter. The other half wants you to read this review, because ...

You've got a good sense of suspense building here, and despite myself (this is far from my type of story) I want to read on. This is so short, though, ...

Well, that was certainly a whirlwind of a chapter. You introduced your main character, introduced the plot, got your character halfway across the world, got your character to her destination, ...

(Sorry this has taken so long, Pro.) I like this a lot. Great action as far as I can tell (this is not my usual genre.) I'm getting a decent ...

Oh my goodness, whatever did happen to the formatting? I think you need to go into "Edit" and take off the center justify and whatever strangeness the site has imposed ...

Haley, my junior year of high school, I perpetually had "It's a Hard Enough Life for Us" stuck in my head. In fact, every time I was in newspaper, I'd ...

Hi there Anne, This is well written, and as such, my only comments on any technical matters would probably be nit picks. In fact, I only really have three semi-objective ...

Hi MMurray! First things first, let's get you up to speed on the formatting and technical stuff and all the good and jolly matters of punctuation. Not very fun, I ...

:D Why, I've never met you before in my entire Internet life!

:D I'm so glad you're here I still can't quite contain myself.

This chapter took an unexpected trip into the abnormal, and I'm now doubting Tony's mental state. I'm beginning to doubt that Vincent exists. In fact, I'm growing more and more ...

Why, Haley my dear! So good of you to join me! :D

This was really well balanced from a plot perspective. You introduced just enough to keep me interested in the plot and story, but you didn't tell me what's going to ...

I wanted another young writers' forum where I could read and critique. I Googled. And here I am.