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Hmm... first, I think it's important not to confuse the length of the piece with how quick or slow it seems. Because this piece, to put it bluntly, was both ...

Gah, so sorry it took so long for me to get back to you on this! I need to remember to click 'subscribe.' I'm actually kinda relieved that this is ...

Your bribe/threat was so intriguing I came right over and read. But, I didn't read anyone else's comments. And thus, I apologize if I repeat anything or contradict anything without ...

Blackbird, Skins--I'm on it! :D

I think that when it comes to first person narratives, readers are more than willing to overlook the fact that if this were a real first-person account, it would have ...

I'm going to disagree with ThatBoy and say that the informalness was great and that the formalness is what you have to watch out for. Through most of this, you ...

Blackbird, Tigs--reviewed.

Everyone so far has had a lot of good comments. Follow their advice. No point in having punctuation and formatting errors drag down your work, after all. So pick up ...

Very, very well written (to echo the others) and, as you mentioned, polished. I have a few nitpicks of my own that I'll add at the end of this for ...

I'm still liking this a lot, and you're still dishing out information about the plot in just the right amounts. Looks like Spork already mentioned the comma in that first ...

Psst. Watch your homophones! I was all bracing myself mentally for this piece because 'bare' should be 'bear' and 'no' should be 'know' in the first glimpse of this I ...

Welcome to Rach and Ribbit's Reviews, Incorporated! We are currently OPEN for business. Yes: + Any original fiction (aka, not fan fiction) + Especially fond of fantasy and science fiction. ...

Wow! Thanks everyone! I don't much like superhuman boyfriends either. I prefer mine perfectly human, if I do say so myself :) And hidden jokes? They're probably there without me ...

Thanks Talulahbelle! I'll go round up those commas. I turn my back for one second, and they go get themselves misplaced or lost. What can you do. And fiction903, it's ...

I didn't read the nitpicks Jetpack picked out, but I agree with everything else she said, and so I'm assuming she got the same of the errors I caught. The ...