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Yo, Formslipper. I'm Rach, here to review for ya. What I liked about this was its control. It was a very controlled narrative. It flowed well and with direction. It ...

Hey, Curse! Welcome to YWS! I'm Rach, the frog's Ribbit... and I (well, we, if you include the frog) was/were once new too. Thankfully it's like chicken pox. I hope ...

Okay, this was seriously awesome. So awesome for so many reasons. I think I want to go read it again. It was awesome. (Hello, by the way! I'm Rach :D) ...

Hi, IKnowAll. Good job with the paragraphs, and the cutting down on ellipses. Much better, though you could probably get rid of the rest of the ellipses here anyway with ...

Hi, Anonymous Anarchist! I was going to nickname you AA but then I realized that wouldn't quite work...hehe. Anyway, I'm here to review, and at this point, I just have ...

Hi Crimsona! I think I reviewed a chapter of this waaaay back when, but I haven't read the chapters in between then and now. So, I'm going to be useless ...

I'm baaaaaaack! (And I bet I'll beat Azila too... mwahahahahaha) Okay, so don't freak out about the upcoming text wall. Just pay attention to the bolded words...and my various ramblings...and...other ...

Hi, Soulkana! Here to review as best I can...I haven't read the other chapters so I won't be able to get into too much detail. What happened was that I ...

Snoinkus, I am here. It is 10:25 pm. My essay is edited (read: I have up on the essay once it reached turn-inable) and I am tired, but I am ...

I was on this like a frog to a lilypad. Hehe. Anyway, hello. I hope I'm your first response. I do enjoy being the first person to respond so. It's ...

And you are hereby forgiven for the length of the previous chapter. Downside of having to read things in serial-style online, I suspect. So I take back my comments from ...

Making it members-only is a great idea. Also helpful, especially if you're looking for help on more overall stuff (like trimming down plots and characters) would be to find a ...

I'm reporting that Ultraviolet for being a fearless and epic reviewer--as well as a great member to review for, as she responds with great questions. She means business on both ...

Hi Vi! I haven't read the original version of this, so this is going to be a review not taking the whole 'revised' part into account. Obviously, it's polished, as ...

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. I think that was enough w's. No, wait, I lied. Few more: wwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. True to your word, this was short, and sweet, and absolutely adorable. So, thank you for ...