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thanks alot for your citique i'll will take into account all you've said

Please leave a critique even if its only small

I'm no punk. It wasn't really meant to be a story i was using it to create a chracter and wanted to hear what people thought of him. For instance ...

This was in answer to an exam question. Incase your wondering why it was written

Thanks. I am working on second story and your replies will really help. Any one else reading i would greatly appreciate any views you have

Please bare in mind that it is my first attempt at a short story. Thankyou for your Critique

This was not as good as the first installment. Yet it was still very enjoyable to read.

I thought that the story was a little immature. The dialouge was very unrealistic. It could do with more chracterisation aswell so more tension can be created