Quetseli

It's so sad. :( But it's a wonderfully done story. Great job! I would only sugest that you maybe put this in a letter like way. Like it can start ...

It's a sad poem, but I like it! There are a few word mistakes I caught, but those can be fixed. The emotion in this is very noticeable and I've ...

When I feel myself waking, my mind is in a fog. As if the deep mist has fallen over it, clouding, and making it hard for my thoughts, my memories, ...

That was amazing! I loved it! I couldn't find anything that confused me or that was in need of fixing. You described everything so well! Wonderful work! You must continue!

That was great! I loved how you used the "Why so serious" in there. That was clever. X3 The only thing I would say is to describe your characters and ...

That was good! The only thing I would say is when other people are speaking, press the "Return" or "Enter" button so it's on another line. You crowded the conversations ...

It's well done! Lovely work! You should go back though and capitalize letters and correct some words that I saw. Words that had a different meaning then the one you ...

It would be a lovely song if it were real. :3 Good for a child, maybe. I listened to a slow song on my Itunes as I read this and ...

It good! I like how you're going back and forth between the characters, if that's what you are trying to do. X3 Again, you could describe things a little deeper, ...

This is a pretty good poem. You seem kinda new to the poem stuff(I am X3), so if you are this is lovely. The story to it is clear, the ...

This is well done piece of work! The only thing I would suggest is to slow down it your writing. You seem to speed up to get to something more ...

This was a moving piece of work. It's brings out the facts of what really happens in this world and reading this brought out emotions in me. The anger he ...

Its a beautiful poem! Your descriptions are done very well and I could see the mountains , the lake, everything you described. The only thing that confused me was that ...

@Trick. Yeah I'm writing more. I posted a new one just today! Thanks for the review, also! X3

It's a lovely story. Sad too, because of the death of Peter and that an old woman is crying(I hate when old people cry because I begin to cry too ...