Quetseli

That's really strong. It ask so much of something that seems so small but is in fact so big in our lives. You were right to say that the question ...

I think it's a good story so far. You made the reader question about the man as well as leave off with a cliff hanger at the end, hightening suspension. ...

I think it's an interesting poem. The fact you made a hidden meaning to it makes it better. Maybe of a abusive relationship? I'm not completely sure, but that's how ...

Wow, those are beautiful. The only thing I would say is the church one, the car kinda threw it off and I would wait until both were gone before taking ...

This is some creature I drew maybe last year(?). I wasn't trying to draw something from anything, it's just a creature that popped in my mind. I wouldn't be surprised ...

It's a very interesting story. You seem to try and keep the reader wanting to read more by not full explaining and doing so later. You also describe things quite ...

I think it's a good start to a blooming story. There were a few grammar mistakes though, but they can be fixed. Another thing is near the beginning the woman, ...

The clock ticks by seconds, the sound exploding in my ears like cannons. The seconds seemed slow and minutes seemed longer. Master sits at his desk, looking grim faced. A ...

I think it's a good start. You really keep the reader hooked by wanting to know more about what is going on, the time period, the protest. It's well described ...

You people never understand me You people only hate You people taunt and tease And laugh in my face You people never see me You people just walk pass You ...

This isn't one of my best, but I just started making a poem about the events in both the book and movie of Alice in Wonderland. I don't mind crits, ...

I wrote this for a math class. Yeah, poems for math. But it's because the date is soon to be 3/14, hence Pi(3.14). So it Pi Sunday or Saturday. We ...

Oh, its a lovely song. I like it! I can almost hear the guitar in the background. X3 I think it's a lovely song about a girl cherished by her ...

This is good! Has a a lot of suspense in it, which is good if you like to get readers wanting more, because I want to now more already. X3 ...

This is related to the shorts I've been writing lately. It is how I would really make it out if it were written in novel style and the shorts just ...