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This is a good start. Kind of confusing as to where you are going with this story. But i would like to see. I would make this the prologue since ...

This interesting. It sounds like a song. It should be a song. But I liked it. I feel like it should have better flow. It was sorta choppy and felt ...

Awww. This is sad. But it is a little rushed. and It was confusing as to who was talking and who died. but you cleared that up at the end. ...

WOW!!! OMG! As i am writing this i am like crying. This is so beautiful! (i think my boyfriend thinks if gone crazy) but i dont care! I love this. ...

GENIUS!!!! I LOVE LOVE LOVED IT!!! KEEP WRITING!!! :D

Haha. yeah. i just got tired and quit on writing. Maybe when I finish you can suggest a title. And I suggest you go to sleep. :D

thanks.

OMG! Ok so you HAVE to write the third chapter. I am like in love with this story!! I honestly can't wait until the next chapter. I LOVE LOVE LOVE ...

I liked this story a lot! it was a little rushed. and it left me wondering a lot. I had a lot of questions. So i suggest you slow down ...

Chapter 1: My First Day “DAD! MOM! I’m leaving for school.” “You haven’t had breakfast yet.” said my mom. “So? Ugh. J.C. get off of me, you’re crushing me.” I ...

Thanks. :D

Omg. I was like seriously about to cry. I think they should have names though. Other than I couldn't find anything else wrong with it. (maybe because I was too ...

Thanks.

Thanks. I'm glad I could make you laugh. And you know I've read this poem many times and never caught that. I'll get right on it. Thanks for the review!

Dear Mister, can't you see? How much I love thee? I know were aren't lovers and I know we aren't friends. I honestly don't know what we are, but I ...