Pyxis

This was really good. I think the names "Meg" and "Maddy" sound a little to alike though. But that's just my opinion. Others may have loved the names. If you ...

I searched the internet for young writing or something like that and here I am.

Oh well. Monkey it is. :( Though I do think a monkey riding a dragon would be the best mascot. Congratulations, monkeys.

This was funny. I think it needs a different format and more punctuation, though. More people would like it that way, and it would be easier to read. :lol: :lol:

Not really sure if the names fit, crit would be appreciated. Chapter 2 Leif fell hard onto the uneven ground. Above him a hail of arrows flew. Leif rolled to ...

" I was distracted. By Hermionie." Ron pointed over at Hermionie who had walked over to where Ron, Harry and Ginny were on there broms. She had been standing watching ...

NO. Not in a million years, no. ~Dr. Vendosa Ohh, a drawing class. Can I go, pleease, Daddy, please? ~Amelia If you were king of the world, what would you ...

My first thought was the final episode of the Series of Unfortunate Events. But then, it could be any final book in a series. I wouldn't expect it to be ...

Thank you for all the suggestions! I will keep them in mind when I write more. Yes, it is a continuation of the prolouge I posted. :D

Chapter 1 Crispian lay on the hard ground, barely conscious. He had no idea where he was; his memory had been failing him until about a week before this point. ...

It's okay. The grammar is bad. SPACE please! It gave me a headache to read beacause of that. Also, it has a lot a punctuation issues. If you read it ...

Ah, vermin. Unusual taste, isn't it? I happen to prefer fresh berries, much sweeter. ~Johnson

A tall man with dark hair and eyes, who owns a small restaurant. He is very friendly to all of his customers. He has a sharp chin and wide smile. ...

Umm... never really thought about that. I guess I've always wanted to fall in love... ~Gwynn Do you have a good relationship with your parents?

Umm... Not the best. Too repetitive, but that is easily fixed. Also, since it said 'brothers' I thought Eragon/Murtagh, but at the end it seemed that it was Eragon/Roran. If ...