PsychicNinja

Great! I love it! Jaina is my second favorite character, Mara being my first! I love it! May the Force be with you! ~PN and a Star Wars fanatic

Ok.... this was ok.........but um...Kakashi...oh nevermind! It has a good plot and the character interplay is good between Naruto, Sasuke, and Sakura and Emi. It kinda skips a little, so ...

Sounds good! Keep it up! Good luck! ~PN

I liked it! Sounds like a good beginning. I like that it's set in a different village other than Konoha or Suna. The character interplay is ok too. I think ...

Hi again! I like it. Keep it up. Character interplay is good as always! But you really need to explain how Ayumi got the Byakugan or just ditch it! Only ...

Hehe...that was my pathetic, immature outburst. **DELETED** ~Timea

Now your writing a story!!!!! This was awesome!!! I love the interplay between the characters and all. Characters make the story! This totally brings out Itachi and Ayumi, brings out ...

Hey! I have to agree with Sumi about Itachi. I really like your style of writing, though. Sorry...but to tell you the truth....i burst out laughing a few times, because ...

Hi! It sounds good as a story. But when you add in Itachi's personality and Haku's past and doesn't fit in. You should make it a little more believable for ...

Sounds good, Sumi! It sounds like a awesome story in the making. ~PN

Chapter 1 “These clones are perfect.” “Yes. They will do well if it comes to war.” Lira Thell-Ellis and Kwest Omarrin walked alongside the training clone army with pride and ...

Hi everyone! I've got a character. :D Name : Gence Veroi Gender : Female Race : Twi'lek Age : 26 Height : 5'7" Apperance : Red skin, always carries a ...

Anybody mind giving me a rundown on what this story book is going to be about? I know its going to be about Sith. :D I'll be glad to contribute ...

Hi! Great details! I think you have a great story in the making! I love the character of the old man. :) Good luck! ~PN

Hi Amber! This sounds really good. You just have to clean up a few grammar things and fluency problems and your good to go! you might also want ot seperate ...