PsychicNinja

I love it, Audra! I love the different techiniques you show! It kinda all sums up the techiniques they developed! Ya know...I think next time I'll just skip over all ...

Okays! Hello Ash! I have come to crit!...but there's no point in repeating what others have said on the grammar stuff (i don't really like criting that). But the story ...

I still like it! The description is fantabulous. :D It has great meaning, and I get a clear idea of what is going on. You should try to avoid semi-colons, ...

Hi Siegfried! Ok! I read it and I really liked it! It caught my attention, and I liked the dramatic moments! I also like how the story goes right into ...

Hello Star Wars buddy! omg! I really liked it! It was very dramatic and brings out Jaina's feeling! It made me cry! Good job! ~PN

Hi! First off I'd like to say that I really like this story idea! In the prologue there are some grammar problems, which can easily be fixed. Also in the ...

I fixed some more stuff! Hope it sounds better now! 8) ~PN

HaHa! Very creative! I like it! ~PN

I fixed some stuff! :D ~PN

Chapter 2 The image wavered, and then stood up. The gloomy night air gave even more of a mysterious, almost real presence to it. “So…what of this rebellion?” “It is ...

Woot! You reposted it! Yeah, the detail is way better now! ~PN

I will keep looking for more, Ash! I sounds great. I think this installment brings out werewolf and vampire differences. I can't really comment a lot, because it's short, but ...

Wow...I'm the first to comment! Great again, Ash! I love the idea of bringing enemies together to fight another common enemy! Character interplay is great, again. I interaction between all ...

Wow....very powerful, Ash. I have a couple of things: In first part, you use to many "I"s. Try to use less "I"s. There are also a few grammar and fluency ...

One more thing>>to Jabber's comment. If you haven't read any books, you wouldn't know who Jaina Solo was in the first place. So if you've read them, you can tell ...