PsychicNinja

Omg! Baby brother!!! :smt056 :smt049 :smt049 Your Sis

Hi! Well this next bit is good. A little to short to do a good crit, but I''ll do my best. There's one point where you changed from saying "Jens" ...

Good job, Zoltan! Although, it wouldn't half as good if I hadn't edited it before you posted. :smt045 But you still didn't take some of my advice. So here's the ...

Really? I've never, ever seen it used like that? ~Timea

And Jabber, it's like 7 years before the story I'm writing now starts. :D :D ~Timea

Griff, it's based off the story that I posted earlier. (Read that if you want, too :D ) It's posted in fan-fic the same reason mine is--it has elements (e.g. ...

Sounds great, Zoltan. ~Your Sis

Hi! I think Jabber and weekend_warrior covered up most of the things I was going to mention and suggest, so I'll try not to repeat! :wink: This part was great! ...

Oooo! Sounds great! The Governor sounds like an interesting character, that you should explore more! This sounds like a great plot set-up! Can't wait to read more! ~Timea PS. You ...

Hey! I didn't read the second chapter, but the first one was great! The plot sounds like it's going to be really good! SW rocks, by the way! Sounds great, ...

Thank you all for posting! I posted this chapter so fast, all I did was type it, and then post it! I didn't have time to proof-read! I'm so sorry, ...

I have used your suggestion, Shadow. I really like it :D. ~Timea

Eol allowed Lira and Kwest to stay in her house for the night. Despite the outside looks, it was a comfortable home. Before they left, Kwest made sure to give ...

Hmm..interesting. The story is getting increasing more complex! This is much better! I notice just one grammar mistake, I think. The Jedi seems like an interesting character! I hope you ...

This was pretty good. I understand your story more. I agree with Jabber and Hunter, Vader was out of character. And once again, I will not repeat what the others ...