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Re: The Official Goodbye/Departure Thread
I shall be gone from Wednesday (tomorrow) night to...Monday! Spring break sure is going to be fun. At least there'll be warmer weather where I'm going. ^^ ~Timea
Apr 9, 2008 -
Re: Friendship (revised)
Hi! First of all, I really liked this. I just don't like the last line. It sounds kinda off and doesn't make much sense. Perhaps it's best if you come ...
Apr 9, 2008 -
Re: Writer's Block revised
It all seems like a good idea...but it seems a little dull and undescriptive to me, like the others have mentioned. If you want to write about Writer's Block, I ...
Apr 9, 2008 -
Re: Soul's Wrath- CH.1 Fading Away
Konbanwa! I shall crit as I go. ^_^ Its been two years since my brother, Kohaku's death. I think this is just a simple error. But first of all--"Its" should ...
Apr 9, 2008 -
Re: Red Eyes- Chapter 2 The hunter and the prey
Awesome. I can really tell that you're improving, Maki-chan. Good work. ~Timea
Apr 9, 2008 -
Re: Red Eyes- Chapter 2 The hunter and the prey
Hey Maki-Chan. Critting as I read: With a steady pace Maki walked down the snow covered path to her cabin. You need a comma between 'pace' and 'Maki'. Each time ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: YWS Desktop
It's cool. I like it. ~the officially bored Psychic Ninja
Apr 5, 2008 -
Re: Miss me?
Yay! More of Alice's lyrics! XD This one was pretty good, Alice. I like some of the rhyming you have in there. My only problem is the last line. ...I"m ...
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: Red star
This was very good, Maki-chan. I liked it a lot. I'm not so good at critting poems, but I thought it was very interesting (if not a tad bit weird..) ...
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: Red Eyes- Chapter 1 Slain Dragon
Sorry, Maki-chan, but this makes no sense if it's in the real world. It should take place in the Soul Society. Some part of the Rukongai with snow. Then it ...
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: Through the Still Night-Prologue Version #2
Tell me which version is better, please! This one's in first person, too. ____________________________________________________________________ Warm blood on cold skin. A kunai driven deep into an oppo
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: YOU.youngwriterssociety.com
Yay! Thanks, Nate-sama! ~Timea
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: Red Eyes- Chapter 1 Slain Dragon
Gryphon-chan, Shirou-kun's eyes are he really isn't an albino. Bleach is awesome!! Haha, that's okay, Maki-chan. ^_^ I enjoy helping other writer's become better. YWS helped me a lot. Just ...
Apr 3, 2008 -
Re: The Official Goodbye/Departure Thread
I'm gonna forget, so I might as well comment here now. I'm going to Hungary/Greece/Europe for six weeks from the second week of July to the end of August. And ...
Apr 2, 2008 -
Re: Rate the Signature Above You [2]
Haha. 6/10 BTW-My siggie's from Naruto, so that's why some people may not get it. XD
Apr 2, 2008