PsyLynx

I like it much more than your other one....some of this feels a little repetitive...I think you should cut between three and five lines, you choose which, and it would ...

perfect, man, thanks a bunch. It's very very beautiful and deep.

I don't know, man, it was kinda...cliche. Nothing really cool, no images, nothing to grasp onto. Just abstract good vs. bad shit, and no specifics as to what happened...I think ...

Totally funny, man. :lol:

I like it, but I think it's too that, by the end, you get used to the style and it doesn't feel new or exciting anymore, but just predictable...I think ...

I thought it's really good....reminds me of a sadness I sometimes feel, and rarely but occasionally am consumed by....and it reminded me of night, and loneliness, and staring at dying ...

oh god, musical (good musical) poetry, and lots of it....perfect. Don't change anything.... I say "oh god, musical poetry" because it can be sooooooooooooo cool....man. Thanks. A

completely wonderful...timeless (in my mind...I suppose acid rain isn't timeless, but whatevs, this piece feels timeless). And it's really, truly beautiful and great. A

oh, and though I don't think that I get into it in this part, though I might, spazming stars don't actually exist, I just like the concept. If I don't ...

*I don't need help with typos, because I'm really good at catching them when I reread, which I haven't done yet...but if there are any obvious grammar mistakes that I've ...

some details don't seem to fit...he's been all alone in this place for seventeen years, and he still feels awkward when he speaks to himself? And nobody came to town ...

sorry, I couldn't read wasn't a story, nor was it science fiction, it was a report....I've done and read enough of those in my day. I think that's why nobody's ...

I can't think of anything to change, it's absolutely funderful.

it makes sense to me, Jennafina. I liked the beginning, I love disjointed stuff. Fuck Sam. I think it went way too long, lost my attention after a while, and ...

I really liked it a lot. Some of it...seemed a little bit boring, in its simplicity, but...some of its simplicity was quite lovely. I adore the stanza "the pavements are ...