PsyLynx

haha, awesomecoaster. :P

yeah, I agree with what people said, especially with Snoink's appraisal. I'm not going to dissect the thing any further; it's pretty good, but people had good advice.

I don't like it as a poem. I can definitely feel that it was inspired from a song, and often that happens to me and I write things that I ...

The only line I didn't really like was the "I need you tonight (ache)" because it's, well...cliche (as if everything that's worth saying isn't) and because the very next line ...

I like it, and think that you should edit away your explanation; I was thinking of war, hell, all of these terrible things, and getting all of my own ideas ...

erm, tisbe sad, and, well....wrong. Still, it definitely captures something about the shittiness of this society, because I know a trillion people who could have written this, word for word.

If by 'random' you mean that her similes and metaphors weren't cliche, I'd say that you're right. If you meant it in a bad way, you're definitely wrong. This was ...

It really can't be longer, because there's a song that this is a deviation of. Morning has broken, like the first morning, daytime is dawning, like the first day....yadda yadda ...

*note! This is a true story* Morning Has Suckéd 9-11-05 Morning has suckéd, like the first morning. Daytime has blown hard, like the first day. Some say it’s apathy, say ...

Screw Incandescence. I hate him. Lol. I should give him credit that once he was online, and I got all emotional at him and he let me, because I needed ...

Wow, this was refreshingly good. (HUNTER: Yeah, this sentence can stay, the rest must go) --Psy.

HUNTER'S EDIT: If you're gonna say something, say something constructive, Psy.

HUNTER'S EDIT: Again, say something constructive or say nothing at all.

The puppy is yummy, the shoe is just a well-drawn shoe...which doesn't appeal to me too much, per se, but that is simply because I don't really pride myself on ...

I love your style, the strong lines...hard for me to describe, duing to my limited art vocab, but I definitely like the first more, because the second weakened the lines ...