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Re: Chapter 1: Irritum
Hey there, Just a few grammar mistakes: Once upon a time their was a princess. there I closed the children book and looked up at the crowd. children's The dialogue ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 3] DANNY
Me again. :D “Hey! Mr. G, I’m done,” I said after I found him standing near the rose garden, staring at particular withered yellow one. He turned around, nodding at ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 2] DANNY
Hey again, Haha, loved this. Mr. G. :D Really nice, and the whole angel like a lot. :) “Take care of her?!” I thought '?!' wasn't proper punctuation, but I'm ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 1-part two] ALIA
Hii, Again, the tense thing. It keeps jumping from past tense to present tense. Also, her getting into the limo with a stranger and stuff is totally unrealistic. To me, ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 1-part two] ALIA
Hii, Again, the tense thing. It keeps jumping from past tense to present tense. Also, her getting into the limo with a stranger and stuff is totally unrealistic. To me, ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Mr. Angel...[Chapter 1-part one] ALIA
Hiya, I love Alia. She seems awesome xD. Anything wrong with it has already been pointed out ^^ I also noticed that sometimes it changes from past tense to present ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Dying Love
Hii, Idea sounds interesting. :) Your dialogue needs punctuation though, like StoryWeaver13 pointed out, and there were parts where it sounded kind of fake and unrealistic. "No, I am fine," ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: The runaway camp chapter 1
Hiya, I like the idea. I like the way your story started with a *bang*. It seems like an interesting idea. Anyway, my dad hit me several times and tried ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Hey
Hi, WritesAllDay! I'm Priceless, and I'm a newbie too. xD Hit me up if you need a review or something. :) Hope you enjoy!
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Hold your breath.
Wow. That was amazing, truly amazing. You just got everything right!! To me, at least. I loved this, it was really good.
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Hii!!
Aww. :) Thanks..you guys just seem to know each other so well and stuff..it's like a family. A writer family. xD
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [4]
10/10, awesome :)
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Mischief Managed: Saying "Until Next Time" To Harry
Beautiful article :) Harry Potter *was* amazing, it feels kind of weird that it's over. I loved the whole series, it was just freaking amazing. Hermione's always been my role ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Broken Pieces. Prologue
Heyy, I really liked this. It was very beautifully written; it flowed so well. :) I saw just a few mistakes that theotherone already pointed out. Very interesting, I look ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: Hii!!
:) Well, I'm not exactly Kenyan..I'm half Arab, half Indian, but I just live here xD
Jul 23, 2011