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oh, and i almost forgot. the teacher, when she says, "what the hell are you two laughing at!" well i would change that because i don't think a teacher would ...

I luv it. but a lot of times when you finish dialogue, you go ." He. sry if thats confusing, but if you write dialogue and you don't need an ...

okay, that was pretty good. at first, i thought it was a little strange that you were like acting like the reader was actually with you, but now i actually ...

yeah, so. this is my first post. be harsh though, plz, cuz i kinda have experience lol. so, yeah. thanx! Chapter 1: “Pat. Move. I can’t see.” Pat turned around, ...

awww i luved it but it was so sad. oh, and one thing on grammar: you say "tie" wehn i think you mean "time". but i stil loved it!!!!! i ...

awesome story luv it :P