Poltergiest

Okay, now I've read the third part. It was good, like the rest. I think you should explain the shuttle bit a bit more. He could have tried to escape ...

Dorian ran from the group as they gathered around the small electric mouse. He glanced back every now and then, eventually sneaking off into the shadows. He ran deep into ...

Dorian jercked up appruptly. He strained his ears and listened attentively. What was it? He asked himself. "Vioces?" He whispered. He stood and turned around suddenly. Through the trees there ...

Mmm... Cheerios... But really! Thnx for the crits. Its really hard to compose the perfect fight. I have it all in my head but its hard to tranfer that fast ...

It made me feel... Empty. As most poetry does. And as I've told everyone who I have posted this reply on I'll tell you. Me feeling empty is a good ...

Okay, this is after reading the second part. Again very good. Is it a flash back or are you gonna keep the story here? Only everyone else who's read it. ...

Sorry but my mind keeps fluttering back to a girl in my class in elementry school. She was... Annoying... Sorry... Vathen ~Pol

Okay, can't wait. First of all, does Team Magma respond to Giovanni like team rocket? Also, assuming by its name Twin leaf Town in in a forest. Just need clarification ...

My favs are 3 and 7. 3 cause of the dementors and Sirious and stuff. 7 because of the mega perfect ending. Who else thinks the ending is perfect. I'm ...

*Splutters* Okay, lets try this... Name- Ralo Gender- Male Age- 18 Eyes- Empty black Facial- square jam and small amount of black hairs on chin Hair- deep, messy brown Appearance- ...

The fact that Mrs. Weasley swore at all is mindbogling and aw inspiring. Realy... I LOVED the ending! :mrgreen: What was everybodies fav. part?

~*~*~ Kill…Kill… Darkness… Khor’s head was still swimming. He knew where he was... On a hard sheet of rock... But his body and mind was telling him he was in ...

Very good. I think you could have slipped in the last part with Kiera in part 1 however... Anyway, I think he king is a fat, stupid idiotic fool who ...

I completely loved it. Especially the part where Kiera kept cutting off her mom. I wish I could do that. Anyway, I didn't really understand the part with Brad and ...

*~*~* Knall was jumping from branch to branch, hearing the dead getting closer. It was beginning to become morning. The light was now streaming through the trees. He continued jumping ...