Polkadots

I think this was written very well, and I love the story of Perseus also. The only thing that I didn't quite like was the Point of View. It was ...

I have a character and her personality is meant to be whiny, but how do I convey this nature to readers without making her annoyance?

Starting out with conventions, your sentence structure has a slight variation but it leans more on the uniform side. You might want to combine your sentences a bit more to ...

I found this piece to be rather dry. It lacks any sort of description and lacks any figurative language or adjectives. I think you tell too much rather than show/guide ...

I think it's an interesting concept, but it seems a bit like an info-dump to be also. Is this meant to be a prologue or just a chapter or a ...

She's an artistic girl who is constantly on the look for inspiration. She's a freethinker and noticeably offbeat. Diana Parana

An quiet intelligent man who thinks out things thoroughly. However, he's fiercely loyal and protective of family and friends when needed. Alice Berkeley

I'm trying to make a plot oultine formy new plot. For my first novel, I winged it completely and it came out a complete mess. I couldn't find a way ...

Hi, I'm new here also. Welcome.

Thanks. =D I found this through a google search also.... I usually read mysteries, medical thrillers, and fantasy and I usually write mysteries and fantasies, too.

I use last names for all my characters they just don't seem too whole to me without one. I don't always write it into the story, but I usually have ...

It depends on what scene I'm doing. I like to listen to Corinne Bailey Rae when there aren't too many action scenes and during action scenes I usually listen to ...

I agree with Pol. It annoys me for some reason when I'm reading a book and the chapter is only one page. If it's going to be that short you ...

I enjoyed your story. Your descriptions are quite vivid - especially in the second world. The descriptions were precise and well-worded and flowed well and gave amazing imagery. I could ...

Hello...I'm Polkadots..there's nothing else to say really. Introductions are always awkward.