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I don't really like the second version. It's a bit choppy and more info-dumpy and informal as the person above said. Just try to make it less of an "explanation" ...

I noticed a few errors in grammar: The strawberry bushes were practically torn from the ground and the skinny trees were bent and touching the ground. I crawled from the ...

I read the first chapter in the store of Twilight and the first chapter of New Moon on her website. I'm probably going to read it soon (it's checked out ...

I found this to be interesting and had a very eerie feel. Your word choice was keen, especially for your characters. I can't find anything to really point out. Very ...

I found this piece to be interesting. Your protagonists is quirky and her tone is believable and upbeat. However, it's a bit of a info-dump. I don't really need to ...

Accentuated. Especially when it's followed by "her curves". Or when it's used in a sentence like "he said in a voice accentuated by a (insert stereotypical romantic accent here)"

Hmmm....a quiet, bibliophile who has an odd obessision with Indian culture. Adriana Peregrine (f)

"Grace Kelly" Mika

I agree with the previous reviewers, you have a knack for stringing words together to create stunning imagery. I couldn't really find anything wrong. Only if it turns into a ...

Blackwater is one out of several. What they did was wrong, but there are others that do their job. And I call getting rid of a genocidal war criminal and ...

They're the silliest most pathetic attempt at masquerading as a church. And the fact that they're teaching their children the doctrine is sad. Also, not every Christian is homophobic. Excusing ...

Really nice tips. I plan to use these with my next novel for Nano...

I want one, but I doubt that I'll get one...I don't even have a regular ipod. The commercial is awesome though - Feist is one of my favorite singers.

I agree, you shouldn't judge the Omar by his parentage, but the idea of a speedy marriage such as this is silly. It seems like she just wants media coverage ...

Does anyone like House? Are you planning to watch the season premiere tonight?