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Ooh I have a strange piece that needs critiquing before I can enter it into a contest...I'm a bit unsure of it myself, so critique would be very nice! :)

LOL! I just got back from being AWOL and came here from a critique on one of my stories...But that has to be the most amusing thing I've read for ...

Hello, I will go through my little corrections first, I seem to have quite a few, but I might have just been being pedantic... xD It was an alien feeling ...

Hello, I think I found a couple of other little tweaks... In front of me lightening lit up the sky lightening ---> lightning Also, as someone else mentioned, I thought ...

(Author's Notes: It has actually been a long time since I have managed to write a proper piece of short fiction like I used to, and it was quite tough. ...

(Author's Notes: This is actually a story I submitted to the 2006 halloween contest, but I like it and decided to modify it and repost it so I can have ...

In England it's metre xP Yeah, thanks for the advice, I think I'm not very good at the whole romance thing, but I'm going to try and make it reasonable ...

Notes: Yeah, I decided to experiment with making a first person narrative that was a bit more personal to the character, I probably didn't choose the right style of story ...

Hmm...I liked it overall, but I still find certain parts of it a bit hard to believe or imagine... I'm not sure some of the names are entirely believable, 'Timmy' ...

Yup. No lives. And we get points for posting! :wink: Good luck getting acquainted to the site, I may end up critting more of your works in the future! :)

I always go up to the first post and edit that... ...That way if more people come along to crit, they are critting the improved piece, rather than picking up ...

XD I'm not lying. I'm not very good at poetry...This however was narrative and things, so it worked out alright in the end! =) And some things i do think ...

The Shallow King For seven years the king had reigned, Yet no worthy damsel had he claimed. The problem, to his squire, he'd laden, And bid him find a worthy ...

But, still. Maybe try a semi-colon! ;)

Wow, you did really well to keep that in the appropriate narrative voice! Though, I feel you might be able to tweak the first couple of paragraphs to flow better, ...