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Re: Mystery on the Nile
You don't really describe Flara Sanchez or Blakleigh Evans. All I know is that Flara has a manicure and Blakleigh has green eyes. Other than that it's a pretty decent ...
May 15, 2007 -
Re: The House
WOW this is Really good. There's not much else i can say. #Queen of the Pirates#
May 14, 2007 -
Re: Freaky book girl
friends they are the greatest and the worst. Anyway slightly sad life story, not that mines a whole lot happier. Well just saying HI!! #Queen of the Pirates#
May 14, 2007 -
Re: Hardcore Dancing While No One's Looking
You like playing the guitar?! so do i though I'm not very good at it. i haven't been able to get any lessons and have a learned a little from ...
Apr 25, 2007 -
Re: Chasing Rainbows Chapter 1
I'm not going to point out the grammar mistakes since everyone else already has. I've never read a story about circus performers so this a good and new idea. You ...
Apr 23, 2007 -
Re: Prologue
It's a good start and I will be looking foreward to reading more. Other than the paragraphs crammed togther which you already explained, there are a few other typos. Also ...
Apr 20, 2007 -
Re: Nameless Poem
I liked your poem it flowed nicely and i was able to paint a picture in my head. I'm no poet so i can't really critique it and i have ...
Mar 21, 2007 -
Re: The Story of Skye Phantom - Chapter 1
They were a few typos like Her grin on his hand and shoulder were like stone. It should be grip not grin. I'm not a huge fan of fantasy, but ...
Mar 19, 2007 -
Re: Bittersweet
I loved it! there were a few typos, but it flowed nicely. Are going to post more? I'm dying to know what happens next. #Queen of the Pirates#
Mar 19, 2007 -
Re: It won't kill anyone
I liked it. It was very pretty and the magpie wanted to take it to make her nest. I think you can find a better description than "very pretty" not ...
Mar 15, 2007 -
Re: Angels in the City
I really liked your story. I didn't see any typos. I'm aweful at grammar so i can't say anything about that hehe. excellent work #Queen of the Priates#
Mar 15, 2007 -
Re: Innocent Love
actually uncorrupt is a word, but untaint isn't. That's why i had to put untainted. #Queen of the Pirates#
Mar 15, 2007 -
Re: Himdil
Excellent! I have no idea how you can think in old english, but it's great. #Queen of the Pirates#
Mar 14, 2007 -
Re: Fugitive
Sitting on my bed the thoughts of what had happened earlier that week, were still fresh in my mind. Screams of hysteric children after hearing the gunshots still rang in ...
Mar 14, 2007 -
Re: World's Apart.
Good start to the story. You need to make it more clear about who's talking. Aslo i would suggest using less exclaimation points because with over use they tend to ...
Mar 14, 2007
