Piranha

Ahh! It's been so long since I've been on here and I'm desperately trying to learn the new interface and everyone is beating me to everything I want to say ...

It's kind of odd how I found this poem-- I was browsing the main page and as I was glancing over the online users, I saw the name 'Muse,' which ...

Guh. Guuuuuh. *droooool* Let's get one thing straight. I am not a fan of rap music. I greatly dislike rap. But I loooove rap verses, and this sounds like a ...

Nice piece of work! I don't know how many times I've read about a personified sun, and yet you still manage to write in such a way that you held ...

Thanks for the warm welcome, everyone! I feel bombarded by smilies and support... and it's a good feeling. :D Complete with cheesy announcer! Charlie should know I bite anything covered ...

anger to "sweets" I'm confused too. It's a little awkward here. Maybe anger to sweet or you're angry, then sweet or even your anger goes/turns sweet Otherwise, it's pretty solid. ...

feel free to be as harsh as you want please. Ah HA, the Piranha's favorite bait! I kid. ;) I never try to be deliberately offensive. On to the critique! ...

I'm a big fan of existential poetry, and this is no exception! It reminds me of an Aesop's life lesson a la fairytale, and I'm a huge fan. I only ...

This was hard to read, and I'll admit that I didn't read it all, but I will respond to what my eyes did manage to catch, and hope it helps ...

Actually, despite your warnings otherwise, the first stanza is my favorite! I love the line ' Love as clear as the mourning[sic] skies .' When I think of morning skies ...

I've been lurking YWS for a few days now, and was so delighted with the submissions and the users and the community that I couldn't help but join in the ...

I like this! Very raw and powerful. I have some tips on how to make it more so; I understand why sentences are chopped up at key points. It adds ...

I really, truly love this. It's clear and concise, yet the metaphor is exotic enough to keep this a poem. It's a really wonderful blend! That being said, I'm not ...