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Hi :) I definetely think you should carry on with this! She was wearing some kind of black slinky dress that basically ended right below her thighs. I'd leave out ...

mhmmcolleen- done! RGallagher- done! asxz- done! Serendipity- done! All your stories were great! :D

Hi :D I really loved this!! I have hardly anything that could be improved, I think you have it pretty much polished :) In my eyes, autobiographies are for people ...

Hi asxz! :) Really good job here, I'm sure you'll do well in the contest :wink: I haven't read through the other comments so sorry if I repeat anything :D ...

Hi! :) I really liked this story- Its not got a lot of action but I don't think that matters as it describes an emotional moment that is just as ...

Hi! :) I skimmed over the other chapters and I think you have a great story here, the way you have managed to show not only the emotions of the ...

Hi :) sorry it took a while, I've had a ton of coursework to do :( I haven't been able to go over it much so I'm not very happy ...

asxz- 1, 2 and 3 all done! :) I really enjoyed reading all of them, looking forward to seeing where your story goes- Hope I was of some help, mmmmm ...

Hi! :D This was really well written- you have managed to show a truly moving piece brilliantly. I think a lot of nitpicks have been done already but I will ...

Hi :D I really like this part- its a bit less panicky but you've still kept it interesting. Its left me wanting to read more! :) I could almost have ...

Me again :) You've managed to keep the thrill factor throughout this piece too- which is hard to do so well done! My muscles were only warming up after the ...

Hi! :) This is a really exciting beginning, from the very start to the end its got my heart pounding. I haven't read every one's comments so sorry if I ...

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Here's a few I thought of :D I'm not sure why! Molly Eliza Sasha Lila Roxy If they're a boy maybe Max Daniel Leo Liam

Hi :) I love giving reviews! I think I'm becoming a bit addicted :shock: I will review anything story-ish, I can't really do poems or lyrics but if you like ...