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Re: G-d's Ways
You, my teacher, tell me to respect every person, Simply because they are G-d's creations, And hatred towards another being, Is hatred towards the "Almighty". And, that G-d speaks out ...
Aug 8, 2011 -
Re: Always and forever
Well, I'm being honest right now, hope you're not one of those people to take it strong, but I didn't like it. The point you were trying to show was ...
Jun 7, 2011 -
Re: The Call of Old Friendship
No one can write a letter To an old friend, Full of remembrance and comfort. You can list the endless memories… In that treasure chest full of them. But old ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Bleached
All right, I know poetry isn't supposed to make sence - but really. It was good, but either I'm stupid (which as far as I know isn't the case) or ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: Hey, Boy!
That was so funny! I know you probably didn't mean it to be humorous, but that was so realistic!!! Did that actually happen to you? Cause it did to me!! ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: Letters to the Front Line
That was a really good poem. I don't think you should keep a certain number of lines in each letter because it kinda emphesizes the point that her as well ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: My Deepest Apologies
It's fine ;)
May 27, 2011 -
Re: I Don't Wanna Wear My Pants Anymore!
Um, I didn't really get the point of that, but allright go with that - awesome job. A little repetetive, and deffinitely not world-class literature but I do get what ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: You
That was a very nice poem, the doubled lines added some emphasis on the right areas. I could deffinitely feel that bridge in it where you decided to give him ...
May 10, 2011 -
Re: It just isn't worth it
Is this about suicide? Hmm, it's ok I guess, but not too clear, and obviously not a world class poem. I don't mean to be mean, of course, but if ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: Obedience Training
That was the funniest thing!! Really refreshing after all this hard-core, self-loathig, pain-bitching bullshit!! LOL
May 9, 2011 -
Re: The Night
The still black night creeps slowly up, A silent panther, crouching low. It greets the moon and stars with ease, And shifts it's gaze to city-lights. It watches the humans' ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: Pain
Ok, I won't be harsh on you, here's what I think - it does have a lot of potential, and you don't necessarily need to lenghten the short lines. They ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: I hate you.
That was a very cute poem! I loved it! My favorite line was: I hate how you tease me. How you say “Just kidding!” When I thought you meant it. ...
May 9, 2011 -
Re: All I am
That was a very dramatic, self-loathing poem, you read a lot of those on this site, but of course everyone's is unique and special in it's own way. I was ...
May 9, 2011