Pidgin_Princess

You've got a deep, beautiful piece coming along. but some parts are too wordy, others not enough, and this makes it confusing. sorry, again would love to do a line ...

that was a great poem, but it didn't flow very well and got kinda murky in places. as much as i'd like to do a line-by-line, i gotta run.

ok, you've got the right idea going. but I don't like the "weather report" at the beginning. I understand you're trying to set the mood, but I don't feel driven ...

Get yourself REALLY hyped about your story. I like to scribble random notes about tiny details, then get those on paper. Also, set a reward for yourself. Say for every ...

Neato! That's really cool- i wish i could hear it to music! maybe I'll have my music genious friend do it... anyways, could ya add some more verses?? It doesn't ...

um... ok... that was wierd. sorry but it was. It just seems dry. I'm not feeling this person's pain, or feeling disturbed by their thoughts.

awesome! that was insanely helpful. I'm suddenly inspired to write... good thing, too. Got an assignment due Thursday :)

wow! that was so sweet. It really caught me! I almost feel bad doing a line-by-line, but with some nitty-gritty details you'll have just about the most amazing poem ever!! ...

wow! that was really good. ok, now hold on while i find SOMETHING to critique... (half an hour later) aha! two things. 1. some of those middle lines don't need ...

GRRRRRRRRRR! my computer isn't working, so I can't give a full-out critique. ok, well this is a great story idea. really. it's just... dry. I mean, i read the words, ...

that. was. amazing! wow, now if only I could put my thoughts into words like that... the only criticism i can give is it would be a good idea to ...

Great poem!! I love it. However, this one stanza bugs me: A thousand years, They’ve kept me away, From the world—your beautiful face So full of grace, lingers in the ...

That. Was. Amazing! a few gramatical errors and typos, but I honestly can't remember exactly what they were. I'm sure a quick read-through could help with that. Let's see... what ...

Thanks Snoink! I submitted it now, so I won't be needing any more help. I'll post my next one, though!

Hey, I'm turning 14 in a few days, and I really want to send something to Stone Soup before I do. I know that's not really a proffesional magazine, but ...