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Chapter One- Breaking Curfew I like to think that there are two different worlds. One is bright, clear, and safe. The other is dark, full of shadows and danger. Day ...

Try the twin children of Rapunzel! They can be any age, really, and it'd be cool if they had some humorous conflicting dialogue, with them fighting, trying to outdo each ...

OMG!!! It's finally arrived! Wait a sec, cardiac arrest, you can't come until I've critiqued this! Okay, now that that's over with, on with the critique parade. -Too much dialogue. ...

Wheeee! First review! Okay. It was well written, a little less light-hearted than the first story, but the plot and characters become a little clearer. I like Manzana a lot, ...

Thanks for the reviews! I've got another part written, so I'll probably post it this weekend if I'm not too busy!

Not that there's anything really wrong, but, why doesn't anyone oppose the keeping the baby option? It just seems like it'd be more natural that way. That's all I have ...

Again, just one thing- the keeping the baby decision made in the past few parts is a little hurried. My neighbor went through a similar situation (okay, almost identical) and ...

Woah! People who aren't falling all over Eragon! Finally! I couldn't even finish it, and that's saying something, as usually my parents have to physically pry books out of my ...

Hey, can you space it out a little maybe? I read it, but it was like scaling giant wall of dark text. Oh, and while I like the biblical twist, ...

Whoa! You have zero reviews and two posts! Firstly, never post twice in one day, especially not in one category, and you're also supposed to review two things for every ...

First of all, read this aloud to yourself. It feels like you randomly posted it after writing it in half an hour. Almost all the sentences are simple, so it ...

Nice to uh, read your post? I used to swim, before the stupid surgery, and I loved it! Of course, my extrordinarily paranoid Mom won't let me try archery "what ...

That's an amazing story! I'm already on my way to your site!

Hmmm....Jared. My cousin's got the same name, except he happens to be, well, er..., let's say he knows a LOT about certain substances that the police don't like you having. ...

everyone's already said what there is to say about the edit, but I'll put my bit in anyway! Love Aurora, she's not the typical boring princess who requires rescuing, and ...