PhoenixBishop

It's Amon to do your first prize review. You have a lot of good advice on this one so I'll do my best to point out different points. ~*~ Above ...

Chad~ I heard a knock on my door I got up to see who it was. I was hoping it was Maria but it was Alex. The sudden urge to ...

It's me again, here to review as requested. Her pale face, now spoilt with skin that no longer had any flesh to stretch it out evenly, looked tired and used. ...

Travis~ I manged to get a job at a nearby coffe shop, it only paid 5.60 an hour. So at this rate I'd be able to get my sister here; ...

Travis~ I shook my head. "I don'thave the money to get her hear. I'm thinking about getting a job in town, but I suspect that could take a long time ...

Amon here with the second review. :elephant: The air felt cold on my skin, and the slight breeze that rushed past me ever so often felt like a hurricane as ...

It's Amon here to do your first review. It has quite a lot of previous reviews so I'll do my best. :D The explosion happened at mid-day. At first it ...

I have to write about how three pieces of advice helped me or hindered me. I'm not sure how to create a thesis statement for this. This is what I ...

You say awkward, I say people

Funny but since I'm a guy I say 6/10

Travis~ I had just come from the nurse with a ice back to my throbbing head when I saw the girl that helped me up. Mary I believe was her ...

Did you ever wonder what would happen if Adam and Eve never committed original sin? Here's where we find out. \ Have you ever, instead of did you ever But ...

I think it can work if you approach it in the right way. I think it would be difficult to make a whole novel out of it but a short ...

I agree with Rosey a Character is created through their interactions. I especially like developing a characters personality by creating what I call a pot. This is when multiple characters ...

First off, consider what real people do when they show emotions. Use actions to describe emotions. If the person is mad, they can do the obvious and slam things down. ...