PhoenixBishop

Now that you have the basic formula to making a villain lets get more complicated. Let's start with reasons for them to do their deeds. This is a further detailed ...

Engrossed in his music, he did not realize how far he had come from the town. Suddenly, his car started giving jerks and then stopped. Show don't tell, what sounds ...

Hey I'm Phoenix Bishop and I will be your reviewer today. Ok, I really don't know how this will pan out, it sorta just came to me one night, I ...

This is very true, because of my lack of dating I'm not sure when I came up with the idea for the novel I've been working on for years. All ...

Justin~ Kara and I came back with very little to show for our work, when we got there Magneto seemed to ave regained his strength. With that are now small ...

So are we going to let the bomb go off or are we going to disarm it some how. Because if it goes off we can all write about pulling ...

Travis~ I got off the bus with my sister. "This is going to be fun," Lily said. "We need to talk about you killing our father," She rolled her eyes. ...

Chad~ I heard Mike tell Maria to talk with Alex who had a bomb. "No it's too dangerous, I'll do it" I said. "He won't blow Maria up, he'll blow ...

I'm confused by the posts now, where are they now. They aren't at the camp yet are they?

Done :D

It's Phoenix here to review your piece. :D So the main character is a horse, that is good. I don't really think you need the prologue. Prologues are usually used ...

I find that I need a reason to review, i look at all the works and I don't know what to review. So I'd like your help, so I can ...

Justin~ I had followed Fury ever since he found me,and I had respected him, but all my respect faded away today. His actions got most of my team and his ...

Justin~ I woke up to Ella shaking me, at the same time her voice blaring in my head begging me to wake up. I got up groggily. "Stop shaking me," ...

Justin~ The aircraft came into view of the battle and I quickly did a analysis. Most of the morlocks were dead, and Fury's team were far too scattered. I saw ...