PhoenixBishop

*Sorry been preoccupied lately. Chad~ I wondered vaguely what Maria had done to get that kind of money. I tried meeting her eyes to silently question her but she wouldn't ...

His eyes moved to the various people surrounding the body. Some had their eyes widened with shock while others remain impassive. remained I believe “I deserve this do I?” he ...

Phoenix here to review It’s six o’clock in the morning. That alarm is anything but what I want to hear after just getting in just a few hours ago. My ...

Paris~ Layla and I manged to fight are way to Ray just as the bell rang. I looked around to see every one stop what they were doing. I let ...

Paris Aquarius I poured the water out of my two gourds. Then lifted the water with my mind and sent it spiraling across the field in then I lowered the ...

Here is my crtique of your novel. First off it's not long enough. A short novel starts at 50,000. I believe yours was in the 40 thousands. Anyway saying that ...

Paris Aquarius The principal came out and raised his hands to silence the crowd. "I respected him because he was the Leo sign and only survivor of the last attempt ...

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So you know what this is for. First order of business. What will be the game we play to test our abilities? and the second order of business. There are ...

Paris~ Aquarius So crisis averted for now, I thought as all went to the local icy shop. We all sat down in a booth with are various ices. I licked ...

Crash. try not to start with Sounds. She was an elegant, bronze-skinned damsel, so to speak. “I-I’m so sorry.” I don't like damsel. What modern day boy considers a girl ...

Hey I'm here to review your story. At first I started getting frustrated with the lack of information. You piled up many questions and didn't answer them, but at the ...

. Signaling me to create something out of nothing. Out of paper and pencil. Something that will help These two sentences kind of negate each other. Either have it out ...

Paris~ I could sense this could end badly if someone didn't do something. Claudia looked ready to kill Ray in vise verse. "Come on guys, it's very likely that one ...

Paris Aquarius I was coming back from a swim letting the air dry my hair. I had been thinking during my swim, classes would begin tomorrow. Regular school would become ...