Periwinkle

I. NITPICKS I’m pretty convinced that my Dad is beginning to go through a sort of early onset of senile dementia. My Mum noticed the first symptoms[s],[/s] when one early ...

"Your Honor" - Regina Spektor

I. NITPICKS At the beginning, We were there. After we had served our time, They arrived. And then, for a while, there was peace. Quiet and calm. Then, You imposed ...

Quote this. Because I'm goody-two-shoes. You get a dime. Prok gets no dime. This is my third attempt. Please, no one beat me to the punch this time. EDIT: Yay! ...

My favorite singer of all time is Regina Spektor. She's just amazing - all of her songs sound so different and they're so poetic and beautiful and her piano playing ...

Prologue "Are you ready, love?" I ask him, clutching his hand. My blood father was ready to drain his blood and replace it with ours. "Yeah. Let's do it," he ...

I. NITPICKS “Ravyn we need to talk.” Misaki said to him slowly. Be consistent with his name - it’s either “Ravyn” or “Raven”. “ Well… I wanted to ask you ...

I. NITPICKS My heart picked up its pace as I pushed and squeezed through the crowd. My [I don’t like the repetition of beginning two sentences of “my”] mind became ...

Oh, no, don't change her. I just meant that about the blue veins because that's a pivotal part of the author's vampire myth - and her appearance just reminds me ...

I. NITPICKS As my favorite song danced out of the stereo, I bobbed my head along[s],[/s] [it’s better to just say “I made” and nix the comma] making my way ...

Listening to the thunder rolling overhead she crawled into her small hideaway to get closer to the window. She looked out at the grey sky with a smile, this was ...

Hey, Ashley! I read this yesterday, but I had nothing to point out, but now I do! I. NITPICKS And now he is gone and I am alone. I don’t ...

Hey, Werewolf and welcome to the forums! I hope you like here! To change your avatar go to hover over "My YWS" until the drop-down box comes up and pick ...

I. NITPICKS Jealousy. It rages inside of me. I feel that if people look me in the eyes, they can see a fire burning. You start out with something promising ...

I. NITPICKS Rain fell woefully [this isn’t the greatest bit of personification - it’s best to leave out the adverb] , [I think you should use a dash here] the ...