PerforatedxHearts

Gaahhhh. *Covers face* Scaryscaryscary. The writing was very detailed and your choice of words and sentence structure and all that good stuff just made it a little more scarier, if ...

Yaayy. Thank you!

Exactly. It's pretty shallow interrogation, but I like it. XD

Hehe. Alright, I'm making a few adjustments. Thanks again! Meep. >.< This is already rated R, apparently. Don't know why. I didn't do it. >.

Haha. Oh, yeah! I remember those. I always hated how i turned out. >.

I agree with Snoik. I mean, I love the description, it's beautiful how you manipulate the sentences in a way that it almost seems like how i write (hehe), but ...

You've switched, in the beginning, from past tense (with the "ed"'s and such) to present tense, with "she points". It's very brief, but it is still annoying. And besides some ...

Hm. There's not really a difference, except with the "ou"'s, and the "s"'s, but I tend to lean towards "grey". That's about it. English sounds so much more "civilized" than ...

Personally, I think second person is dangerous. I have a phobia of getting caught up in all the "you"'s, and if not, I'm afraid I'll give up on everything and ...

Hm. It'd be nice if you actually posted an actual story....? Also, I'm not sure whether you meant it to be or not, but the prologue seems more of a ...

Yes. I loved reading such diaries, though I think the genre's become somewhat of a cliche. I agree with KingKamor, about the sentence structure, and yes, you do need to ...

Yay! Finally! After a lot of writing, and a lot of thinking, I have added a new section, I guess, that clarifies a lot about Marie and Becca. It will ...

Ahh. Okay. I wanted "no" as a repitition to make a point, but...hehe. Thanks, you two!

“The good times,” we say. “Ah, those memories, those memories from childhood that still keep us alive. What wonderful memories.” Pity the person who lost theirs. “Oh, well,” we shrug. ...

Yay! I've finally gotten "What Was I Thinking Again?" typed up! It'll be in the literary forum. Please read? Heehee.