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Umm...this was...okay. I honestly failed to realize a point to this. Besides rambling on, and on, and on about her "dreamboy". Or Sean, or whatever. Plus, this: Dynamic and in ...

Yeah, I agree with Claud. But though you need to improve on the writing, the voice was okay. A bit creepy, but yeah. The italics are unnecessary, but i sure ...

Very good; your description and the tone fits the romantic genre perfectly. I likey.

Blah. No "OMGFLASHBACK!!!" XD I'd prefer it in italics, if you're going to introduce it directly. When you want the exact information, or when there's going to be a lot ...

I've wanted a blogspot for a long time. But my dad turned it into chinese. darn it. :/ anyways, myspace'll do, i guess.

Thank you both! I usually have a better time coming up with lyrics than the melody. This might as well end up as a rap or something. Haaha.

I'm weird. I crank up the volume, or place my mp4 on repeat on Coldplay, and just write. Usually on the top bunk of my bed. Then I procrastinate a ...

FRUITS BASKET!! Or Furuba, I guess. God. That television show (anime) makes me cry almost every episode. It explores life in a new, gentle way with memorable characters, heartwrenching lifestyles, ...

I need some more info on the greek muses. I know that there are nine, and I won't bother to type their names for now. And that Apollo is their ...

Ditto these two. But besides the interesting name (Trickster), there's not really anything that stands out from this story so far. Try experimenting with different intros and settings. The new ...

Good start. Thank God your grammar is basically impeccable [I hope I'm using the right word], and you've already established your characters nicely. What stands out about this story, one ...

I'm really particular about notebooks. It's just weird. The lines have to be a certain space apart. Not too much. I hate the big-spaced notebooks or pages. Corner Office notebooks ...

A Band Called "The Fakes" See me here, see you there Split by a line but do I care? So I'll just shout at you from this side Shut up ...

Okay. Thank you!

So since Snoik and Pol have already said mostly what's been said. So in a compressed checklist here's what you need to work on: -[POV]. Never, never, NEVVAAA!!!! switch point ...