PenNPaper

Let me think... There was this guy who wore a piece of underwear and nothing else, he walked down a street. A car came by and knocked the guy onto ...

I just started out planning this story, I haven't wrote it out yet. It's about the MC, who is orphaned and a guy, who becomes his master, brings him up ...

Hi DarkSpiral, it's me, PenNPaper, I think you're off to a good story, by the looks of it. Nice prologue, it was a great start. Although it was short, it ...

Nice story, liked the part about the guy putting a knife to the MC's throat. Very exciting. Although there wasn't much dialogue, which made the whole story sound a little ...

An interesting prologue. Although You could have made the story better by mentioning the boy's name. I couln't understand this sentence. 'We waited silently, we did not walk among them.' ...

I have a problem, I cant describe well. Like normally I would just write. She ran up the stiars. Is there anyway or anything that I can do to help ...

It's normal to feel that way. I'm new here too, just started a few days ago. The people here at YWS are nice, even if they think your work is ...

A good story, basically, should have a good storyline. Also, readers will like to see the MC go through many ups and downs. We won't want to see the MC ...

I found this website while browsing online for any teenage writing clubs. I found YWS and instantly knew that I had made the right choice. This site is great, there ...

Okay I'll just review your edited version. Firstly, it's a good read, very descriptive. Also your words are very smooth flowing. And there's a language error. 'She seemed to fly ...

A very good idea, I liked how you began the story. Not many errors I could find. Although I didn't think it was necessary to include the second paragraph, as ...

All together an interesting story that captured my attention, I must admit, although it was short, I was glued to it till the end. Not many dialogues though, it would ...

A true story of science fiction. i liked the way you started, you introduced a problem, as if it was real, but then it was just a training. your words ...

Hi guys, it me PenNPaper. This is another of my stories, there may be a few errors as you read it. Still, hope you enjoy it. I stared hard at ...

Quite touching, actually, although I think there were some commas that you left out. Please forgive me if my corrections are wrong though, this is my first time correcting someone. ...