Pawprint

This does not seem like a fanfic yet, but it will.. _________________ Chapter 1 “I passed!” “I failed!” I chirped sarcastically, mocking Holly’s enthusiasm. She turned to face me with ...

I tried to make it better, but I'm not sure if thats exactly what I did...

I literally have not written for a year! I feel extremely rusty while I was writing this. Well, rip it apart if you have to. Just want to see how ...

That was extrememly good. I was hooked onto it for the whole way! She felt detached from her body: she felt nothing. Then slowly she slid back into her shell. ...

Chapter 1 I walked through the town streets, retraining myself from running. It was a dreary afternoon and not many people populated the usually crowded streets. Even with a clear ...

This was pretty good. I liked it. I especially loved how you started the chapter. It caught my attention right away. Anna would always be there for me, and I ...

I think you should go ahead and start posting it! Sounds pretty good to me. I cannot wait! paw

Well, I think it flowed nicely. But don't listen to me...I am horrible at critiquing poems. XD You started of nicely getting right to the point that you really want ...

Surprised, Col pushed away from me , quickly standing up, two inches away from me . The repetition does not sound so good. Maybe 'two inches away' is enough. I ...

That was very moving. I loved how you chose you words. The street speaks of our grief. The trees stand stone silent in salute. Leaves lie scattered across the pavement. ...

This was incredible! I usually don't read poetry, but this caught my attehtion. I had a weird feeling when I read this. I was saying to myself this is so ...

I climbed into the passage side and she slid into the driver’s side. I think you mean the passenger side. The two warriors got into a similar looking car. Maybe ...

30 years later Maybe you should add: ... after '30 years later' to give an affect. :) “Aubrey! You have a letter,” my vampire housemate Katherine said. You should put ...

It was kind of confusing. I coudn't really follow it. It seemed to go by fast without much details. I couldn't picture the surroundings at all. With having ended the ...

This was AWESOME! (excuse my use of caps) I loved it! I was disappointed when it ended! :) But do not fear me because of what I am. I may ...