Pattycakes

Very cool story. I liked your opening sequence, the character clearly shows conflict with what he's doing and clearly has a past he'd like to forget. The visions thing was ...

You write really good descriptions! Cool way to frame the prospect of not knowing where you are, of feeling sensations without being able to see them. The little twist about ...

The very first sight read was so exhilarating. Every note was there, spelling out a deceptive simplicity in little dots, lines, and sharp tails of ink. The paper smelled better ...

To start, I think this is really good, but since you said you were looking for constructive criticism I'll try to focus on that. the tree was pock-marked from human ...

I would like to say that the book in this story is one of the cooler plot devices I've seen in a while. The first time I read the transcription ...

Everything and everyone he'd seen lately had been obsessed with the act of flight. Eyes were drawn upward as the next mechanical beast of the sky floated, flipped, skipped, or ...

Very cool. Excellent dialouge and back and forths between the troops. The explosion comes as a shock to me when I'm reading as was a nice touch. The commentary that ...

I'm not familiar with the source myth so in all honesty, I can't comment on how different it is from the original but... your telling of it made for a ...

From a lecture entitled , 'The legacy of Monroe and current American Policy'' Given by : Professor Albert Hawkins Location : University of Michigan Date recited : February 17, 2004. ...

1. Does it continue to be interesting? 2. Anything you, as a reader, did not like or thought took away from the chapter? 1. Yes but with a caveat. I'm ...

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Very tense and dark. Your descriptions are very cinematic and you play well with repetitions of heat and cold, and light and dark. The standoff between the two agents was ...

Hey, I really liked this. There was something really raw about the piece and the shifting that I thought worked excellently with the Dylan song you titled it with. Your ...