Pattycakes

He’d never seen real action in the jungles before. It couldn’t be that much different than the flat, sandy, deserts or house to house urban combat he’d cut his teeth ...

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Incandescence: That's a fantastic post, I'll try my best to respond to you and explain on some of my points. Let's just do this in order, I never enjoyed line ...

I support him because I agree with all of his policies For real, ALL his policies? I'm a HUGE fan and even I'm not going that far. You agree we ...

"Katrina you have done your duty, Satan has erected your call. Now in the fiery depths of hell the crowd is expanding. Gustav is on its way, hiding will do ...

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Call it introspection, I'm inspector gadget, I tell you what check, know what check I've had it Can't go-go gadget arm and take the famine out of continents so I ...

To start this was cool and i liked it. I hope this review doesn't come off as too harsh or anything. Well here goes: I thought the characters seem a ...

I'm not a big fan of people bumping their own stories for reviews. If people want to review they will, if they don't they won't. It comes off as kinda ...

Oh boy, time to lay the wood to some non-believers. To start, I'll admit I'm uniquely biased, not only am I an Obama supporter, but I give about 30 hours ...

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A more thorough review and proofreading is attached. My comments are in red, your story is in blue. Hope this helped! General comments: Some of the cross-outs and replacements are ...