Pattycakes

The short version is this is the most well written and thought provoking piece I've read on this website. You are extremely talented. I guess I mostly just wish it ...

I'm hideously late with this, forgive me. Thoughts: qu'est-ce qui se passe? So uh, what happened to the awesome description a la the first couple chapters? I was drowning in ...

The repair took a month rather than a couple weeks. I've been negligent. Forgive me. Onto the comments: So...Sophia... Much better. The little bit about the pub and the change ...

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My comments throughout the piece are in red and enclosed in brackets. At the end I shared some general thoughts I had on the piece. I hope I could help ...

Gone, sorry! PM me if curious. -Pattycakes

Well, I've been sort of acting as the Patron Saint of unreviewed chapters lately. As someone who writes a lot of long stories it can get irritating to watch people ...

My collected thoughts on the first two chapters. 'The crows nest' and other assorted thoughts on mariners You have Lizzie make a comment about the relative ease of being in ...

This review comments on all parts of the story so far, but in particular chapter 2 looked like it needed a review so, here! Prolouge Hmm, I don't think I'm ...

Cool, alright, I've read up to the end of this chapter and on my way through I had some general thoughts that stuck with me. If this review is a ...

Hey I've noticed a trend where when people write longer stories on a site like this the later chapters don't get as many reviews as the earlier ones. So, I'm ...

Okay, first off, thanks for offering this service, I'd be very grateful if you'd be willing to read some of my work. There is something in specific I would like ...

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Okay and a follow up a few chapters later. I think I just have one big comment as I was never really one for grammar line-by-lines. 1. So, the characters ...

There was only one person who could call me at this time, right after school. -That should either read "is" instead of was, or "would" instead of "could". Alright, i ...