Patrick

I like the way the poem flow's. I like the way that it reminds af a beautful day

Simon Armitage definitely!! His poem Kid is hilarious. Talking about someone growing up and learning new stuff but portraying the narrator as Pobin from Batman etc. Its a good read. ...

Definately keep writing poems I liked it, keep up the work.

in_too_deep, The best thing about this is its length. If it were shortened by an additional eleven lines, it would be even better. Frankly, this is junk, and every line ...

Read it while you were writing it. Want to read more, looking forward to it. xxxx

My first and rubbish attempt hope to write better soon Hehe! A question: what did you intend to get across as your message with this poem? :) That it is ...

Okay not sure if this will fit in with your poem, but where you say side and hides, it sounds odd. What about, "I put my hand to one of ...

I don't mean to be discouraging especially when your new to the site... but honestly, what was this? I was reminded of some overdone [cheesy] musical. Also, rhyming. You don't ...

The time is here, The time has come, For me to do, What must be done. I put my hand to one my sides, And take the gun, Form where ...

(Girl)- lexy He tries to be compassionate An emotion he can't convey, The paranoia and insecurity, Consume us and get in the way. (boy)- patrick Never do anything right Feel ...

Like it, loved it, fantastic

I like it please write more