PassionForAPen

She wants to be happy, not cry all the time. Desperate to smile. Shes a butterfly with broken wings, Like an empty playground with broken swings. Worthless, Useless and Lost, ...

Hello! I quite liked this poem, its different. I like the way you kept up the ''Why?'' question throughout, Sometimes its hard to keep your idea going but you Did ...

Ah yay, I edited it and it worked, :D

Thanks but, I already had that done and for some reason when I submitted it it did not come up that way. Thanks for taking your time to read it ...

Hello! :) Upon reading this poem I actually stoped for a minute and was slighty taken aback, Its so short yet its utterly filled with such feeling. I really like ...

Hello! :) First of all I would like to say that I really like this poem, It is quite different and the imagery you use is simply beautiful! I like ...

''Shhh...'' she whispered, Her head resting on his chest, Listening to the heartbeat of her Perfect brown eyed mess. His hand brushed through her hair And he let out a ...

Heya! I think I'm the only person who doesn't see a rhyming problem here? Oh well, on to the poem. I think its wonderful! Its refreshing to see something that ...

Heya! You do need a little work on presentation but I just want to comment on the poem itself. I think as poems about love go this is wonderful. I ...

Heya! I must say i quite liked this. Its rather interesting and its not a typical ''I love you but you don't love me anymore'' poem. I love how you ...

Hey everyone, I'm currently writing an essay for my history research project for my final exams in school, the essay is part of the over all mark I'm going to ...

I quite like this. The way you wrote it very straight forward, no big descriptions, makes it interesting to read. I liked: ''Deep blackness consuming, Eyelids glued down Slip under ...

First of all, Welcome to The Young Writers Society. I thought that this poem was quite good, Its to the point and simple, And you used nice effective language. ''A ...

I quite like this, I don't think that it matters that much that its a common topic, Its personal to you, and that makes it yours, so well done. :) ...

Wow. That was one of the most beautiful descriptions of such strong, yet common emotions i have ever read... [deleted] I adore the way you have written this section of ...