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Thanks for the comment. Due to the topic, little word changes can change a lot of the meaning. The reason I have has instead of had is because I don't ...

Thanks for the review. It is more of a piece about wisdom and how wisdom is the primary goal. Also, some of the corrections you suggested would change the intended ...

"From A to B, I tell you. Yes, from A to B." "From 1 to 2?" "Yes, from 1 to 2." "..." "Symbols. Lines on a page." "And if I ...

I thought that your descriptions were pretty good and the story works under the guidelines of the prompt. You misspelled quite a few words, though, and had some grammar mistakes. ...

I think that one of the biggest problem younger writers have is beginning and ending a writing piece. I felt that your beginning was pretty solid, but I have a ...

I feel like a lot of people can relate to this quote: ‘Love wasn’t meant for me, I got better things to go on for’

I don't think this is the easiest topic to write about, but I think you did a pretty good job. One suggestion, though. I would leave out the Thank you, ...

I think your descriptions are quite good. I would break it down into more paragraphs, though. The descriptions and lack of paragraphs make it seem very dense. Also, noticed a ...

The Parting Act I (A man is sitting with his eyes closed and legs crossed in the middle of a square clearing in the woods. He wore a long tattered ...

Hey, I thought the story was quite good overall. There are some things I noticed that i would fix, though. In Finally it was the week of the play. I ...

I like your writing style, but I think your particular style would benefit from the use of dashes. For example, in The light was so bright, even filtered through the ...

By the other side, the Fallen Angel granted the king an empty book, he claimed that whoever who writes on it; thoughts, time and death itself would move to fulfil ...

J.M. Coetzee writes in a really good third person style that is similar to a first person style. I suggest taking a look at Disgrace .

I really enjoy your writing style. I think you would be able to write good works of literary realism.

I would cut off the last two sentences. The rest of the story kind of implies them.