PandaAiKorai

I understood the meaning behind the poem, before reading the spoiler, though it did fill some gaps. Whether or not you're into this sort of thing, the rhythm of the ...

Rated 16+ for violence. "Will you be my mommy?" Korai's POV I didn't like the accusing way Branden spoke to my mom. But I decided to let it slide. This ...

The poem's mood seems to revert back and forth. At first, I believed Death, or the Grim Reaper, was the unseen entity in this poem, then God Himself. I am ...

Jot and Chance seem to be developing a love-hate relationship. Or somewhat along those lines. At any rate, I loved this chapter just as I enjoyed the others! I hope ...

Sweetheart, I must be honest, your sentences run on so much, my eyes can't stay glued for long. "she tells me, her words slurring just a smidge, Samantha having already ...

Rated 16+ for violence. "And sometimes, I really do fight fire with fire." Branden's POV: She was stunning. From the moment I saw her, I knew she was different, like ...

Me AND my boyfriend were greatly intrigued by your story. I like the part where Lilian's friend comes over with "Didn't she ask?" Really nice twist. I truly hope that ...

It seems that the first commenter had taken the liberty to point out all the issues I'd meant to. You really should go back and check those out, did you ...

This is going to sound extremely harsh, but I couldn't read beyond the first paragraph- hardly that much. I'm sorry, but your use of words is... is almost elementary. ): ...

Turqoise- turquoise. Otherwise, a very sweet piece. I would suggest MAYBE turning this into a poem instead. If I weren't in class, I'd give a more elaborate critique! At any ...

I had to read it a couple times before truly understanding this piece. Because I have read the book, and wondered just which parts your comparing. I'm assuming its to ...

I'm in class, and had to control myself from rotflmao. Haha! Nice way to end such a sweet, short little piece. I expected something deeper, but am VERY glad my ...

"Don't you see how pitiful you look, trying to placate yourself with kleenex tissues? Why don't you stop moping around- you've already been robbed, what have you got to lose?" ...

A heart-wrenching piece! And very easy to relate to. We've all experienced that one person that leaves you in the dust, your heart feeling... dirty, smothered with soot. It's a ...

Is there a second part? Don't leave me hanging! As with the first commenter, I do agree that there are a few grammatical errors that you need to just adjust ...